“Sarah!” I yelled, “I hate you! Give that back.”
She flung my diary at me.
“Jacob?” Her face contorted.
I burned hot. “You had no right to read that.”
“Hannah, that’s disgusting.”
“It’s not like I’m going around telling people. I’m working
on my own issues, OK? I can’t
believe you read that. Nobody was ever supposed
to read that.”
“He’s your stepbrother. Does he know?”
“Don’t be stupid. Of course not.”
“I think he should.”
I died a little as I saw her leave our room.
“Mom!” Sarah yelled down the hall. Dianne was in the kitchen
and when Sarah reached her
Sarah spilled everything she just learned.
“Is this true, Hannah?” Dianne asked.
Silence and hot tears.
“She should go live with her mom,” Sarah said.
Not an option but I wasn't going to talk about it.
Just then Jacob walked in with Greg and Steven.
Sarah’s eyes got big and she leapt for them.
“Don’t Sarah.” My tears of anger turned pleading. “No,
Sarah. Please.” The physical scramble and the emotional supplication wore on my
nerves until I screeched in desperation.
Sarah laughed.
“Hannah is in love with you. She has been for years. That’s
why she broke up with Steven.” She spat out the words, turned on her heels,
and left.
No one said anything. Not Jacob. Not Steven. Not Dianne. Without making eye contact with anyone I left. Sarah was right. I was
disgusting.
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Hi, fellow Campaigner here just looking in. I liked your piece a lot, and am looking forward to read more during the Challenges.
ReplyDeletesarah is evil
ReplyDeletei felt invasion, anger, desperation and helplessness.
what a scene! awesome job!
AW. poor Hannah. Sarah, what a jerk! I want to punch her!
ReplyDeleteWhoa. Lots of emotion there, and all I feel is sorry for Hannah. Great job.
ReplyDeleteSarah - what a creep! Poor Hannah! And what does Jacob think.
ReplyDeleteThat might just have to be flash fiction for another day. :)
DeleteOh my gosh - I feel so bad for her! I just want to hug her. Well done.
ReplyDeleteAgh! I want to read more! This was super super good! Wow.
ReplyDeleteThat was twisted Shelly (I had a little Flowers in the Attic moment--okay, not that twisted). That was chucked full of desperation, anger, guilt. I LOVED it!
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh! That made me want to step on that little girls head for blabbing like that. What a butt head. Poor Hannah:(
ReplyDeleteAww. Poor girl. I want to know what Jacob thought!!
ReplyDeleteMe too!!
DeleteI have to say I agree with everyone else! Really wanted to know Jacob's view. Definitely felt for Hannah though.
ReplyDelete(Also, hello lol, just popped over from the campaign to say hello!)
Poor poor Hannah. What a nasty vindictive girl that Sarah is.
ReplyDeleteGreat flash!
ReplyDeleteSarah is such a B! Great piece, I want to know what Jacob said or did. I'm stopping by from the campaign to say hello and to hit the follower button.
ReplyDeleteI wanted you to know you are in my top 10 for this challenge :)
ReplyDeleteWow, that totally had my attention. It was so sad, I could feel my heart break a little.
ReplyDeleteFellow campaigner here, dropping by to say "Hi". Loved your writing.. as a guy, felt for Jacob hearing that with his buddies right there. Merciless teasing will follow Jacob as well, with a revelation like that. +1 follower.
ReplyDelete--Kevin
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ReplyDeleteFellow campaigner and new follower, (SF group) just checking in.
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