by a confused Chad Morris
I’m trying to write a query letter—no, I’m not a masochist, why do you ask? At this point, I’ve realized several things:
1) Despite all my research, I have no idea how to do this.
2) I know I’m supposed to make my book sound cool, but after a while, it all just sounds like a whole lot of stupid.
3) I need help.
Luckily, I think I know some people who can help—you. Would you be so kind as to look over this draft and help me. Give me feedback in the comments, or email me at email@example.com.
Here it is:
I would like to introduce you to my completed 84,000 word, science fiction novel for young adults—The Invincible Jacob Fink. It is the first of a possible five-book series.
Fourteen-year-old Jacob Fink is seeing things—far from normal things. And of course his visions come the same time his English teacher asks a question, or when Lia finally decides to talk to him. Maybe junior high has permanently fried his brain.
When Jacob follows his visions and ends up with a broken arm and yesterday’s garbage dangling from his hair, he wishes they would go away. As they show him worlds he’s never imagined, Jacob’s more confused than in Algebra class—and he never thought he’d say that about anything. But Jacob feels absolutely, near-paranoid, terrified after he discovers that a kid down the street, a cat under the neighbor’s car, or even an ant in a sidewalk crack might really be shape-shifting aliens—in his town! These creatures can transform into a beasts that fly and spit acid, or monsters the size of a buses that swim through the soil like water. If Jacob doesn’t intervene, they will annihilate everyone he knows in their search for a missing creature—yeah, epically terrible stuff. With some help from his new friend, a Polynesian girl who talks to a journal, Jacob decides to trust his mysterious visions and try to stop the monsters, hoping to find out why all this is happening to him along the way.