The theme is FEAR. Post a short scene (400 words or less) with a character who is afraid. Scared. Terrified. Petrified.
I am still in edits and I'm trying to make sure that I am ready for NaNoWriMo so timing was hard for me BUT I dug through my WIP that I am editing and found a scene that would scare the heeby-jeebies out of me.
A short excerpt from The Glass Slipper Chronicles (a work in progress)
Annabelle picked
up another stick. “Lying to a princess is treasonous.” She threw the stick and
missed.
“And I am guilty,
but you may want to get someone with better aim to administer the punishment.”
Annabelle picked
up several more sticks and a few stones, and raised her hand to throw again.
Then she froze.
Claudio noticed
her stop, and whirled around to see what had caught her attention.
An enormous bear
stood on its hind legs not 50 yards ahead, chewing berries off of branches.
Claudio stood
completely still. “Don’t move,” he whispered.
The bear looked in
their direction and fell forward onto its front feet. Annabelle could feel the
earth tremor beneath her as the bear hit the ground. It must weigh hundreds of
pounds. The bear walked forward, it’s hulking shoulder blades raising and
lowering with each step.
“What do we do?”
Annabelle whispered. She had heard tales of experienced soldiers losing their
lives to a bear in the woods. “Should you use your bow?”
“No,” Claudio said
back in a hush. “Not unless we really need it. Shooting it with an arrow or two
would just make it mad. It takes scores to bring down a bear.”
The beast moved
forward, it’s eyes looking at Claudio then back to Annabelle. It sniffed
several times, then roared. Annabelle involuntarily shuddered as she looked at the rows of
sharp teeth.
Nice job! That would terrify me too! I was instantly intrigued by your characters :)
ReplyDeleteMeeting a bear or mountain lion in the forest is one of my fears! What can you do when you're facing such power? Great scene!
ReplyDeleteExcellent job. I was pulled in right away. Your characters are intriguing.
ReplyDeleteOOOH! Fear! Great for this Halloween theme. Excellent job here. I love to read your stuff.
ReplyDeletegreat characters. And such a tense moment! Aughhh! Great job!
ReplyDeleteNasty. Great subject for a fear fest.
ReplyDeleteOh bears are scary! Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteNooooooo! You can't end there. What happened?
ReplyDeleteFrightening! Well done!
ReplyDeleteShelly, Shelly, Shelly! I'm dying here - I WANT TO READ THIS BOOK! I love your voice, your characters, your scene, and your setting already! Oh, and yikes! - I'm scared of that bear!!!
ReplyDeleteAww, you guys are all so ding dong nice!
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