Query
Tiffany Hart expected seventh grade to be the year she became
popular, not a ghost-seer.
She’s determined to be class president at any cost until a near
death experience bestows Tiffany with an unwanted gift. Now three small
spirit children cling to her, disrupting everything she holds sacred like
sleeping and her Michael Jackson mugs. Even worse, trying to pretend they don’t
exist is making Tiffany act like a freakshow in front of her classmates. The
only person who can help is her neighbor and the weirdest boy at school, Justin
Henderson, a.k.a. The Casper Kid.
Justin has seen ghosts since he was nine, a creepy claim that
has earned him the privilege of eating lunch by himself for years. When his
long-time crush, Tiffany, begs his help with her ghoulish problem, he’s there
in the click of an electromagnetic field detector.
Tiffany and Justin begin
to unravel a mystery filled with murder, orphans, plagues, and skeletons that
leads them to a backyard burial ground. The only thing standing between Tiffany
and normalcy is the dark-hearted apparition who guards the graves and isn’t
afraid of hurting children, dead or alive. In order to survive, they must face
their own demons first. For Tiffany, it’s her pride. For Justin, it’s far more
literal.
DEAD INDEED is a middle
grade stand-alone horror with series potential. The horror and heart of Black's DOLL BONES and the humor of Savage's CASE FILES, complete at 53,000 words.
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To the Slaughter House
We were so far away from civilization that
howling banshees with machine guns could’ve murdered us and nobody would’ve
heard a thing.
Letting Kori Henderson, the girl with the
million braids done so tight I was sure it messed with her brain, drive me
anywhere was mistake enough. Letting her drive me to a spot of serious paranormal
activity was pure stupidity.
I blame Justin.
Grrr.
That nutcase was the reason I was in that
junky minivan, bouncing down a country road in the middle of the night. Sure it
was his sister, Kori, who invited all of us twelve-year-olds to join her friends
on that spook hunt, and, yes, it was my best friend, Jessica, who actually
convinced me to get in the van, but Justin Henderson was always behind all
supernatural weirdness. He couldn’t help it.
Resting my forehead on the cool window I
searched the moonlit hill for shadows behind the scrub trees. The hair on my
arms stood on end just thinking about some old man with a bucket and a
gun that Justin described as a local ghost legend.
How did I let Jessica bribe me with a
slurpee? No amount of sugar could compensate for the way that fear was digging
tiny holes in my stomach.
I couldn’t even watch Scooby Doo all by
myself.
Outside air whooshed in the windows. Scents
like dirt and pine, that were lovely during the day, smelled like a horror film
at night.
I love this story! And I hope some awesome publisher does too!!
ReplyDeleteGood luck in the competition!
ReplyDeleteI loved Doll Bones, and this is adorably cute! (The Scooby-Doo mention got me.) Good Luck!
ReplyDeleteYay, this is awesome Shelly, my 12 yr old would love it. Good luck :)
ReplyDeleteLove the sound of this. I was so into Christopher Pike and RL Stine when I was middle grade-ish and this would've fit right in! Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThis is fantastic! Your voice is wonderful and the premise sounds so fun. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteThis is SO WELL written!!!! Good job! And good luck!
ReplyDeleteI love this premise! So great.
ReplyDeleteOoh! Great premise and definitely well written :) Best of luck to you!
ReplyDelete12yo Tiffany can see ghosts. To stay safe from the evil ones, she must swallow her pride & befriend the weirdest boy in school #PitMad #MG
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Great premise and wonderful writing! Best of luck!
ReplyDeleteThis is very cute--Good luck!
ReplyDeleteI love the ghost kids idea. So fresh.I can definitely imagine how they're ruining her day. Good luck with this entry!
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ReplyDeleteThis sounds like so much fun! I love your voice, and the premise sounds beyond perfect for MG. Good luck with it!!!
ReplyDeleteI like this. Quirky premise that is perfect for middle grade and a voice that pops without taking over. Nicely done. Good luck!
ReplyDeleteConnie
Hopefully I'm not stopping your heart with a comment this morning, but this is great. Excellent voice and truly stand out and creepy premise. Best of luck with Writer's Voice!
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